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you've come to me unexpectedly
and i became your worst nightmare.
you are good and sweet loving
while i'm bad and intimidating.
we started as good friends
and ended up as cute lovers.
never i did considered it love
but pure infatuation at first.
since then we both play music
and share every beat of a song.
they said we're perfect for each other
and surely we will meet such forever
but then I came to a crucial state
where i began doubting myself,
if i can still stand this relationship
coz your love is too much loving
i asked a little space, so i can discern
i beg for you to wait, so i can prepare
though it is hard for you, still you said Ok
soon, it lead to hatred and indifference
you love me too much
and you cried the whole night
coz i can't repent what i've done
to you and to your whole life
it's been how many years since then
but you're still hurting and waiting.
i am no longer the same as before
now scared & lost the one you adore
you're friends loves and protects you
they don't even want me inches from you
they call me dumb & unworthy of your love
guess they're right for setting you aside
i am sincerely sorry, forever i'll be sorry
the wasted time, the broken promises
the love and compassion you've given
it was not worthy at all.
Thank You for not letting me down
despite the difficulties and broken hearts
i do not know what's good to say now
just want you to know, I Love You
YOU ARE MY FIRST LOVE
She's a good girl, loves her mamaLoves Jesus and America tooShes a good girl, crazy 'bout ElvisLoves horses and her boyfriend too
And I'm a bad boy 'cause I don't even miss herI'm a bad boy for breakin her heart
And I'm free, free fallin'Yeah I'm free, free fallin'
SORRY AND SEE YOU WHEN I SEE YOU!
☺ sino ni?
♥ you
juan nicolas
lab
soundBEAT
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ReplyDeletethe wonder of the word "nightmare" is that its tone, no matter how you play around on how it should sound like, would still carry that "fearful" phonetic element; the effect is as quick as the snap of your finger.
ReplyDeletethis really made me teary eyed.. hang ganda
ReplyDelete@Perrine i don't know exactly what you mean, but THANKS for taking time to read and comment, nice to have you here and i'm still thinking what brings you here, Lol i follow you now! :)
ReplyDelete@ate toni: hahaha SOLOMOT ate, naka relate lungsss? miss hanging out with you and ate niki, mmmn i'm starting to blog about "to all the girls i loved before", at isa na to, ayos man?! LMFAO :')
ReplyDeletePoetry is, above than just a play of words, a play on sounds. what makes poetry exclusive and appealing to the intellect is that though it is a play on sounds, poetry should also carry meaning, purpose, backbone, and principle.
ReplyDeleteI read your poem and I find you courageous enough to include the word "nightmare" on it. The word has a different tone, it sticks out like a nail, but in the same time I cannot conclude that it doesn't belong here. I can ask you to rewrite the entire poem but if you'd omit the word "nightmare" in your revision, the meaning of your poem would lack balance.
anyway, keep on writing, and thanks for following. :)
@Perrine: it's getting clear now after reading your comment thrice, LOL, well honestly i don't know anything about making good poems, i just keep on writing and writing, free-flowing, then booom a poem.
ReplyDeletebut it's not actually a poem to me, it's more of a personal love letter, that's why i don't think it's good for me to rewrite it.
anyway, writing is my emotional outlet, though trying hard and looks like a bit hopeless romantic, it keeps me going, hoping also to be a good writer as you are. :)
thumbs up.
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